Question

read the following excerpt from a student essay. how can the writer best improve his or her sentence fluency? if i became student council president, i would make significant changes at my school. i would help my fellow students by being the voice of the student body and communicating openly and effectively with the principal, board of education, school faculty and staff, and parents. for example, i would make every effort to represent students interests on issues such as mobile phones in the classroom, healthy lunch options in the cafeteria, and improved showers and lockers in our gymnasium. in addition, i would focus on organizing more social events for students, including talent shows, sports tournaments, fashion shows, dances with exciting themes, and battle of the band competitions. by combining sentences containing related information by varying sentence length

Explanation:

Combining sentences with related info (e.g., the first two sentences about student council president role) makes the text flow better. Varying sentence length (e.g., short then long) also helps. But combining related - info sentences is a more direct way for sentence fluency here.

Answer:

by combining sentences containing related information