Question

\i finished my second draft and now im ready to check for sentence variety. how can i tell if the sentence variety in this draft is effective?\ what would you say to help this student? ○ try counting the number of short sentences and the number of long sentences. ideally, youll have an equal number of each. ○ try reading your writing out loud. if the variety doesnt work, youll hear it. directions: read the passage and then answer the question that follows. i am applying for this job because i am very interested in engineering. i have studied engineering for the past four years, and i will earn my diploma in early may. i have done extensive research into the uses of robots in the home. i have also developed a prototype of a vacuum cleaner that is powered by dust. what feedback would be most helpful to someone who asked you to examine the sentence variety of this passage? ○ try incorporating some shorter sentences and being more direct. these sentences are long and the reader could easily lose track of the main point. ○ try varying the structure of your sentences. they all start the same way, and the repetition might make readers lose interest. ○ this is great! all the sentences contain lots of information, which means that youre giving readers a lot to think about and reasons to hire you for the job.

Explanation:

• For the first question: Reading out loud helps in detecting sentence - variety issues as it engages the auditory sense. An equal number of short and long sentences is not a strict rule for effective variety.
• For the second question: In the passage, all sentences start with "I", so varying the sentence structure (not just starting with the subject) is a valid feedback. Incorporating shorter sentences is not the main issue here as the problem is more about sentence - starting repetition. Saying it's great ignores the sentence - variety problem.

Answer:

• First question: Try reading your writing out loud. If the variety doesn't work, you'll hear it.
• Second question: Try varying the structure of your sentences. They all start the same way, and the repetition might make readers lose interest.