Question

if you watched a video on improving body paragraphs, copy and paste one of your john lewis paragraphs in the space below. then, make changes to the paragraph and highlight the changes.

in his 1963 \march on washington\ speech, john lewis uses emotional appeals, strong language, and powerful images to show how unfair segregation is and to encourage people to take action right away. he wants his audience to see that waiting for a change is not enough.

first of all, lewis criticizes political leaders and the government. he says that they make deals that hurt black people and doesnt stand up for what is right. he states, \what did the federal government do when albanys deputy sheriff beat attorney c.b king and left him half dead?\ by sharing these shocking and sad stories, lewis makes people feel angry and want to stand up. he also asks, \which side is the federal government on?\ this question make the audience think about if the government is on their side or not.

next, lewis says that having \patience\ for freedom is wrong. he calls patience \dirty and nasty word.\ he repeats, \we will not wait,\ to state that black people have have already waited too long for justice. he tells his audience that we must take action themselves instead of waiting for it. he wants people to feel strong and ready to fight for their own rights.

finally, lewis uses big words to inspire his audience. he says, \all of us must get in the revolution\ he compares their fight to a \scorched earth\ policy\ meaning that they will destroy unfair laws, like the jim crow law, when he states, \burn jim crow to the ground\ and build a better place for everyone. his words show how serious he is when he shouts, \wake up america!\ he is telling everyone that its time to act now.

Explanation:

The task involves improving a written paragraph about John Lewis's speech, focusing on writing (a subfield of Arts) to enhance clarity, grammar, and flow. Changes would include fixing grammatical errors (e.g., "doesn't" to "don't", "make" to "makes", repeated "have", "themselves" to "themselves" context check, punctuation like capitalizing "he" after quotes, correcting "big words" to "powerful rhetoric", and refining sentence structure for coherence.

Answer:

(Here is a revised version with highlighted changes):

In his 1963 "March on Washington" Speech, John Lewis uses emotional appeals, strong language, and powerful images to show how unfair segregation is and to encourage people to take action right away. He wants his audience to see that waiting for a change is not enough.

First of all, Lewis criticizes political leaders and the government. He says that they make deals that hurt Black people and don’t stand up for what is right. He states, “What did the federal government do when Albany’s deputy sheriff beat attorney C.B. King and left him half dead?” By sharing these shocking and sad stories, Lewis makes people feel angry and want to stand up. He also asks, “Which side is the federal government on?” This question makes the audience think about whether the government is on their side or not.

Next, Lewis says that having “patience” for freedom is wrong. He calls patience “a dirty and nasty word.” He repeats, “We will not wait,” to state that Black people have already waited too long for justice. He tells his audience that they must take action themselves instead of waiting for it. He wants people to feel strong and ready to fight for their own rights.

Finally, Lewis uses powerful rhetoric to inspire his audience. He says, “All of us must get in the revolution.” He compares their fight to a “scorched - earth policy,” meaning that they will destroy unfair laws, like the Jim Crow laws, when he states, “Burn Jim Crow to the ground” and build a better place for everyone. His words show how serious he is when he shouts, “WAKE UP AMERICA!” He is telling everyone that it’s time to act now.