Question

millie comes to america
(1) millie was a delightful little girl full of life and dreams. (2) she sees the world through a lens not every young female does. (3) she was exceptionally grateful for everything she had even if it meant she had to experience hard times. (4) difficulty was no stranger to her. (5) she was adopted at the age of five from korea. (6) she arrived in america with one piece of luggage and a shuffling walk due to a clubfoot.
(7) millie never knew her birth parents she was proud and beyond happy to have kevin and judy jillespie as her mom and dad. (8) kevin and judy were in love the first time they laid their eyes on her. (9) they both turned to one another the second they saw her and said shes ours. (10) after many months of filing paperwork creating a photo scrapbook and visiting korea millie was theirs.
(11) four years passed since millie came to america. (12) it was time for her to have surgery on her clubfoot so she wouldnt have to strain while walking anymore. (13) millie was nervous. (14) so very nervous. (15) however, her parents and her top - notch doctor repeatedly told her everything would be just fine, and she would soon be ready to walk with more pep in her step.
(16) sure enough, after multiple operations, millie was able to walk like her parents, peers, and friends. (17) she knew it would be a long road to recovery, but she followed her doctors demands and did physical therapy regularly. (18) it all paid off in the end. (19) millie was forever grateful for her parents and her doctor. (20) she knew they loved and cherished her, she would let them know.
which is the best way to revise sentence 14?
a she was so very nervous.
b very nervous.
c so very nervous was she.
d she very nervous.

Explanation:

To determine the best revision for sentence 14 ("So very nervous."), we analyze each option:

• Option A: "She was so very nervous." is a complete sentence, but the original context (sentence 13 is "Millie was nervous.") might benefit from a more stylistic or parallel structure. However, we need to check for grammatical correctness and flow.
• Option B: "Very nervous." is a fragment, lacking a subject and verb, so it's not a complete sentence and not a good revision.
• Option C: "So very nervous was she." uses inversion for emphasis, which is a valid grammatical structure (similar to "Never have I seen...") and can add stylistic emphasis while being a complete sentence. It maintains the emphasis of the original fragment and is grammatically correct.
• Option D: "She very nervous." is a fragment (missing the verb "was"), so it's grammatically incorrect.

Now, comparing A and C: The original sentence 13 is "Millie was nervous." and sentence 14 is a fragment emphasizing her nervousness. Option C uses inversion to create a more stylistic and emphatic complete sentence, which is a better revision than the simple complete sentence in A (which is also correct but less stylistically aligned with the emphasis in the original fragment).

Answer:

C. So very nervous was she.