Question

use what you have learned in this lesson to revise the following passage for the appropriate audience and impact. select words and phrases that will strengthen this critical analysis essay.
in the declaration of independence, thomas jefferson talks about independence
through his use of big words and fancy argument skills. first, jefferson states his thesis, which makes it
independence. next,
ng of england and how he mistreats the american colonies
. finally, jefferson suggests that colonists should
, which is the obvious answer
to the colonists’ problems.
options in dropdown (partially visible): analyzes the purpose of government, supports independence, suggests independence

Explanation:

The goal is to elevate the passage for a critical analysis essay, replacing informal language with precise, academic phrasing that reflects rigorous analysis of Jefferson's rhetorical and persuasive goals in the Declaration of Independence. Each selection aligns with the structural flow of the document and formal academic tone.

Answer:

1. In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson supports independence through his use of big words and fancy argument skills
2. First, Jefferson states his thesis, which makes it analyzes the purpose of government independence.
3. Next, [he outlines the tyranny] of England and how he mistreats the American colonies suggests independence.
4. Finally, Jefferson suggests that colonists should [pursue full separation], which is the obvious answer to the colonists' problems.

Revised full passage for critical analysis:
In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson supports independence through deliberate, persuasive rhetorical strategies. First, Jefferson states his thesis, which analyzes the purpose of government to frame the moral and philosophical case for independence. Next, he details the tyranny of England and how it mistreats the American colonies to suggest independence as a necessary corrective. Finally, Jefferson argues that colonists should formalize their separation from Britain, which is the just and necessary solution to the colonists' problems.