Question

revise -- possible corrections
\it faced or seemed to face the whole external world for an instant, and then concentrated on you with an irresistible prejudice in your favor.\

• \it faced -- or seemed to face -- the whole external world for an instant, and then concentrated on you with an irresistible prejudice in your favor.\

Explanation:

The revision adds dashes around "or seemed to face" to set it off as an aside, making the sentence structure clearer and emphasizing the alternative phrasing.

Answer:

The revised sentence with dashes around "or seemed to face" is a better - structured and more emphasized version of the original.