Question

read the sentence.

the patient who was not feeling well told the doctor her head hurt and that she was experiencing blurry vision with her eyesight.

which answer choice is the best revision of the sentence to avoid repetition?

• not feeling well, the patient told the doctor about her problems with her hurting head and blurry vision in her eyesight.
• the patient told the doctor about the symptoms affecting both her head and eyesight.
• the patient told the doctor about her blurry vision in her eyesight and her hurting headache problems.
• the doctors patient told the doctor that her head hurt and her eyesight was blurry.

Explanation:

Identify redundancies in the original sentence

The original sentence is: "The patient who was not feeling well told the doctor her head hurt and that she was experiencing blurry vision with her eyesight."

• "The patient who was not feeling well" is redundant because a patient visiting a doctor is implicitly not feeling well, and describing symptoms like a hurting head and blurry vision already establishes this.
• "blurry vision with her eyesight" is redundant because "vision" and "eyesight" refer to the same concept.

Evaluate the answer choices for repetition and clarity

• Option 1: "Not feeling well, the patient told the doctor about her problems with her hurting head and blurry vision in her eyesight."
• Retains the redundancies "not feeling well" and "blurry vision in her eyesight".
• Option 2: "The patient told the doctor about the symptoms affecting both her head and eyesight."
• This option is concise, clear, and completely eliminates the repetitive phrases ("not feeling well", "hurting head", "blurry vision with her eyesight") by summarizing them into "symptoms affecting both her head and eyesight."
• Option 3: "The patient told the doctor about her blurry vision in her eyesight and her hurting headache problems."
• Retains "blurry vision in her eyesight" and introduces "hurting headache problems" which is highly repetitive.
• Option 4: "The doctor's patient told the doctor that her head hurt and her eyesight was blurry."
• Contains repetitive phrasing ("The doctor's patient told the doctor").

Select the best revision

Option 2 is the most effective revision because it removes all redundant words and phrases while retaining the core meaning of the sentence.

Answer:

• (A) Not feeling well, the patient told the doctor about her problems with her hurting head and blurry vision in her eyesight.
• (B) The patient told the doctor about the symptoms affecting both her head and eyesight. (Correct answer)
• (C) The patient told the doctor about her blurry vision in her eyesight and her hurting headache problems.
• (D) The doctor's patient told the doctor that her head hurt and her eyesight was blurry.