Question

read the sentence.

cambria sang in her schools talent showcase three songs making her grandparents proud.

which is the best revision of this sentence?

• cambria made her grandparents proud when she sang three songs in her schools talent showcase.
• making her grandparents proud, cambria in her schools talent showcase sung three songs.
• three songs sung in the schools talent showcase made cambrias grandparents proud.
• cambria sung three songs making her grandparents proud of the schools talent showcase.

Explanation:

Analyze the original sentence

The original sentence is: "Cambria sang in her school's talent showcase three songs making her grandparents proud."
This sentence contains a Misplaced Modifiers issue. The prepositional phrase "in her school's talent showcase" is placed awkwardly between the verb "sang" and its direct object "three songs." Additionally, the participial phrase "making her grandparents proud" is separated from the action it modifies, creating a disjointed and confusing sentence structure.

Evaluate the options

Using the Misplaced Modifiers knowledge point:

• Option 1: "Cambria made her grandparents proud when she sang three songs in her school's talent showcase."

This option is grammatically correct, places modifiers logically, and clearly expresses the relationship between the actions.

• Option 2: "Making her grandparents proud, Cambria in her school's talent showcase sang three songs."

This option still contains a misplaced prepositional phrase ("in her school's talent showcase") interrupting the subject and verb.

• Option 3: "Three songs sung in the school's talent showcase made Cambria's grandparents proud."

This option is passive and changes the focus of the sentence unnecessarily.

• Option 4: "Cambria sung three songs making her grandparents proud of the school's talent showcase."

This option uses the incorrect verb form "sung" instead of "sang" as the simple past tense verb, and alters the meaning (making them proud of the showcase instead of proud of Cambria).

Select the best revision

Option 1 is the most natural, grammatically correct, and clear revision of the original sentence.

Answer:

• (A) Cambria made her grandparents proud when she sang three songs in her school's talent showcase. (Correct answer)
• (B) Making her grandparents proud, Cambria in her school's talent showcase sang three songs.
• (C) Three songs sung in the school's talent showcase made Cambria's grandparents proud.
• (D) Cambria sung three songs making her grandparents proud of the school's talent showcase.