Question

legacy - the school of sport sciences (tutor) english iii 2026
correct modifiers and concise wording
eliminate redundancy in writing

1 it amazes me that a week ago, only seven days prior to the big event, i was so worried that my camp presentation on conservation would be a big flop. 2 a teacher once told me that if you grab the audiences attention at the very beginning, theyll be hooked. 3 she was right. 4 i began my presentation by showing how a solar cell and a simple wire powered by the sun could use the suns powerful rays to make a fan spin.

which is the best revision of sentence 1?

• it amazes me that i was worried that my conservation would be a flop.
• it amazes me that a week ago i was worried that my camp presentation would be a flop.
• it amazes me that a week ago - seven days prior - i was so worried.

Explanation:

🆕 New Concept Discovered: Eliminating Redundancy
Removing repetitive words to make writing concise.

Step 1: Analyze the original sentence

Let's look closely at sentence 1 from the passage:

"[1] It amazes me that a week ago, only seven days prior to the big event, I was so worried that my camp presentation on conservation would be a big flop."

Notice the phrases "a week ago" and "only seven days prior". Because "a week" is exactly the same duration as "seven days," using both phrases in the same sentence is redundant (it repeats the same information unnecessarily).

To make the sentence concise, we need to eliminate one of these repetitive time references while keeping the core meaning intact.

Step 2: Evaluate the options

Let's test the given choices to see which one removes the redundancy most effectively while maintaining a clear, grammatically correct structure:

• Option 1: "It amazes me that a week ago – seven days prior – I was so worried."
• Analysis: This option still contains both "a week ago" and "seven days prior." It does not eliminate the redundancy.

• Option 2: "It amazes me that a week ago I was worried that my camp presentation would be a flop."
• Analysis: This option removes the repetitive phrase "only seven days prior to the big event" entirely. It keeps the essential information ("a week ago" and the worry about the presentation being a flop) in a clean, concise way.

• Option 3: "It amazes me that I was worried that my camp conservation would be a flop."
• Analysis: This option removes too much information, changing "camp presentation on conservation" to "camp conservation," which makes the sentence confusing and grammatically awkward.

Answer:

It amazes me that a week ago I was worried that my camp presentation would be a flop.