Question

jackie robinson is the greatest athlete america has ever known of. an athlete has to be talented if he wants to be a legend, and many awards were won by robinson for his talent. not only did he break the color barrier in baseball, he was also an incredible diplomat, speaker and he advocated for civil rights.

rewrite the student passage using the usage rules discussed in this lesson.

Explanation:

Identify grammatical and stylistic issues in the student passage

• "known of": Ending a sentence with an unnecessary preposition ("of" is redundant after "known").
• "and many awards were won by Robinson for his talent": Inconsistent voice shift from active to passive. It should be active ("Robinson won many awards...").
• "an incredible diplomat, speaker and he advocated for civil rights": Lack of parallel structure in the list. It mixes nouns ("diplomat", "speaker") with a verb phrase ("he advocated..."). It should use parallel nouns ("diplomat, speaker, and advocate for civil rights").

Apply corrections to the passage

• Sentence 1: "Jackie Robinson is the greatest athlete America has ever known."
• Sentence 2: "An athlete has to be talented to be a legend, and Robinson won many awards for his talent."
• Sentence 3: "Not only did he break the color barrier in baseball, but he was also an incredible diplomat, speaker, and civil rights advocate."

Finalize the polished rewrite

Combine the corrected sentences into a cohesive, grammatically correct paragraph.

Answer:

Jackie Robinson is the greatest athlete America has ever known. An athlete has to be talented to be a legend, and Robinson won many awards for his talent. Not only did he break the color barrier in baseball, but he was also an incredible diplomat, speaker, and civil rights advocate.