Question

use what you have learned in this lesson to revise the following passage for the appropriate audience and impact. select words and phrases that will strengthen this critical analysis essay.
in the declaration of independence, thomas jefferson talks about independence
supports independence through his use of big words and fancy argument skills
formal english and classical argumentative structure. first, jefferson states his thesis, which makes it
g seem important that the colonists get suggests that the colonies should have independence. next,
jefferson gives evidence against the king of england and how he mistreats the american colonies
references his mistreatment of the american colonies. finally, jefferson suggests that colonists should
stop paying taxes and fight, which is the obvious answer
to the colon
ignore the king and live life
reject the king’s authority and revolt
stop arguing and make peace

Explanation:

The goal is to revise the passage for a critical analysis essay, using formal, precise language that aligns with the historical context of the Declaration of Independence. We select options that reflect the document's purpose of justifying colonial separation and rebellion with academic tone:

1. Replace "talks about independence" with "supports independence" to clarify Jefferson's persuasive stance.
2. Replace "big words and fancy argument skills" with "formal English and classical argumentative structure" to use academic terminology for rhetorical analysis.
3. Replace "makes it seem important that the colonists get" with "suggests that the colonies should have" to convey a formal, analytical tone.
4. Replace "how he mistreats the American colonies" with "references his mistreatment of the American colonies" to maintain critical analysis formality.
5. Replace "stop paying taxes and fight" with "reject the king's authority and revolt" to accurately reflect the Declaration's core call for rejecting British rule and formal rebellion, which matches the historical and analytical context.

Answer:

Revised passage:
In the Declaration of Independence, Thomas Jefferson supports independence through his use of formal English and classical argumentative structure. First, Jefferson states his thesis, which suggests that the colonies should have independence. Next, Jefferson gives evidence against the king of England and references his mistreatment of the American colonies. Finally, Jefferson suggests that colonists should reject the king's authority and revolt, which is the logical culmination of his grievances against British rule.