Question

tamitha needs to rewrite this sentence so it is direct, avoids wordiness, and yet contains all necessary information: \in order to obtain all of the results in a timely fashion, it is critical for any and all participants to direct their communication to the coordinator on, or at least no later than, july 21 so that an official count can be determined.\ what rewrite should tamitha choose?

in order to obtain all the results in a timely fashion, it is critical to contact the coordinator on, or no later than, july 21.
to determine an official count, it is critical for all participants to contact the coordinator by july 21.
everyone should contact the coordinator as soon as possible.
the coordinator needs an official count in a timely fashion.

Explanation:

Analyze the original sentence for wordiness and redundant information

The original sentence is: "In order to obtain all of the results in a timely fashion, it is critical for any and all participants to direct their communication to the coordinator on, or at least no later than, July 21 so that an official count can be determined."

• "In order to obtain all of the results in a timely fashion" and "so that an official count can be determined" are redundant purposes.
• "any and all" is wordy; "all" is sufficient.
• "direct their communication to" can be simplified to "contact".
• "on, or at least no later than, July 21" can be simplified to "by July 21".

Evaluate the given options

• Option 1: "In order to obtain all the results in a timely fashion, it is critical to contact the coordinator on, or no later than, July 21." (Fails to mention who needs to contact, and retains wordy phrasing like "on, or no later than").
• Option 2: "To determine an official count, it is critical for all participants to contact the coordinator by July 21." (Direct, eliminates wordiness, retains all necessary information: the purpose, the action, the actors, the recipient, and the deadline).
• Option 3: "Everyone should contact the coordinator as soon as possible." (Lacks the specific deadline of July 21 and the purpose).
• Option 4: "The coordinator needs an official count in a timely fashion." (Lacks the action required by participants and the deadline).

Select the best rewrite

Option 2 is the most direct, avoids wordiness, and retains all necessary information.

Answer:

• (A) In order to obtain all the results in a timely fashion, it is critical to contact the coordinator on, or no later than, July 21.
• (B) To determine an official count, it is critical for all participants to contact the coordinator by July 21. (Correct answer)
• (C) Everyone should contact the coordinator as soon as possible.
• (D) The coordinator needs an official count in a timely fashion.