Question

read the sentence.

after sampling a few cake samples, the woman who is getting married picked the flavor of cake that she liked the best.

which answer choice is the best revision of the sentence to avoid repetition?

after sampling a few cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor.
after tasting cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor.
after tasting the cakes, the woman getting married picked the best cake flavor.
the sentence is correct as written.

Explanation:

Analyze the original sentence for redundancy and repetition

The original sentence is: "After sampling a few cake samples, the woman who is getting married picked the flavor of cake that she liked the best."

• "sampling... cake samples" repeats the root word "sample" unnecessarily.
• "the woman who is getting married" is a wordy way of saying "the bride".
• "picked the flavor of cake that she liked the best" is wordy and repeats "cake".

Evaluate the answer choices

• Choice 1: "After sampling a few cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor." (Still repeats "sampling... samples").
• Choice 2: "After tasting cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor." (Eliminates "sampling... samples" by using "tasting", replaces the wordy description with "the bride", and removes the repetitive "cake" and wordy "liked the best" phrasing).
• Choice 3: "After tasting the cakes, the woman getting married picked the best cake flavor." (Still uses the wordy "the woman getting married" and repeats "cakes... cake").
• Choice 4: "The sentence is correct as written." (Incorrect, as the original is highly repetitive).

Identify the best revision

Choice 2 is the most concise, clear, and effective revision because it successfully eliminates all forms of wordiness and repetition.

Answer:

• (A) After sampling a few cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor.
• (B) After tasting cake samples, the bride picked the best flavor. (Correct answer)
• (C) After tasting the cakes, the woman getting married picked the best cake flavor.
• (D) The sentence is correct as written.