Question

guided practice
read this excerpt from a student’s persuasive essay about smoking.
smoking is as bad for your eyes as it is for the rest of your body. you can develop serious eye conditions. they can cause vision loss or blindness.
which rewrite of the excerpt would make the best revision in the context of the essay?
a. smoking is as back for your eyes as it is for the rest of your body, although you can develop serious eye conditions, and they can cause vision loss or blindness.

b. because smoking is as bad for your eyes as it is for the rest of your body, you can develop serious eye conditions. they can cause vision loss or blindness.

c. smoking is as bad for your eyes as it is for the rest of your body. if you smoke, you can develop serious eye conditions that can cause vision loss or blindness.

Explanation:

• Option A uses "although" incorrectly, creating a contradictory logical relationship that does not fit the persuasive context.
• Option B uses "because" which misframes the causal connection between smoking and eye damage.
• Option C clarifies the link between smoking and eye harm with "if" for a logical, persuasive flow that strengthens the original excerpt's argument.

Answer:

C. Smoking is as bad for your eyes as it is for the rest of your body. If you smoke, you can develop serious eye conditions that can cause vision loss or blindness.