Question

1. if a revision is needed, which of the following is a correct revision of sentence 17?

(17) in 1929 she married diego rivera, a well - known mexican artist.
a. diego rivera, a well - known mexican artist, she married in 1929.
b. she married diego rivera in 1929 a well - known mexican artist.
c. a well - known mexican artist, in 1929, she married diego rivera,
d. no revision needed

1. what edit, if any, needs to be made in sentence 18?

(18) they has a very stormy and emotional marriage including a divorce and re - marriage.
a. they had a very stormy and emotional
b. they have a very stormy, and emotional
c. marriage including: a divorce and re - marriage.
d. make no edit

1. which of the following revisions contains more effective phrasing than the original sentence?

(19) he was a mentor to her artistic abilities and the person who was the greatest admirer of her work.
a. he was who was the greatest admirer of her work as a mentor to her artistic abilities.
b. he was a mentor to her artistic abilities and the greatest admirer of her work.
c. the person he was, was the greatest admirer of her work, and was mentor to her abilities.
d. he was her artistic abilities mentor and was the works greatest admirer.

1. which of the following is the best revision of sentence 20?

(20) being that frida was the great love of his life, she was also his most trusted art critic.
a. although frida was the great love of his life, she was also his most trusted art critic.
b. because of the fact that frida was the great love of his life, she was also his most trusted art critic.
c. since frida was the great love of his life, she was also his most trusted art critic.
d. being that frida was the great love of his life, she was consequently also his most trusted art critic.

Explanation:

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Original sentence (17) is grammatically correct and well - structured. Option A has an awkward word order. Option B misplaces the modifier “a well - known Mexican artist” making it seem like 1929 is an artist. Option C also has an odd word order.

The original sentence (18) has a subject - verb agreement error. “They” is plural and should be followed by “had” (past tense as the events are in the past). Option B uses “have” (present tense) which is incorrect. Option C misuses the colon.

Original sentence (19) is a bit wordy. Option A has an awkward construction. Option C is overly convoluted. Option D has an odd phrasing “her artistic abilities mentor”. Option B simplifies the sentence without losing meaning.

Answer:

D. no revision needed

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