Question

read the following excerpt from a student essay. how can the writer best improve his or her word choice?
electric eels are some of the most hideous creatures on the planet. they have flattened heads and long, disgusting, tube - shaped bodies. though they look like eels, which are also revolting, electric eels arent true eels; theyre more closely related to catfish.
electric eels get their name from the electrical charge that they use to viciously stun their prey. thankfully, they live in streams and ponds in south america, far from the united states, where i live. the main part of their diet is fish, but electric eels also eat birds and small animals. its horrifying but true!
by including more vivid sensory details
by removing overly biased language

Explanation:

The essay uses words like "hideous," "disgusting," "revolting," "viciously," and "horrifying," which are overly biased and express a strong negative opinion rather than presenting objective information. Removing such overly biased language would improve the word - choice as it would make the description more neutral and focused on factual details rather than the writer's personal, extreme feelings.

Answer:

by removing overly biased language